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This page was a joy to make <3
Go Ketek go!
Enjoy!
Caran d'Ache Supracolor Soft coloured Pencils on A4 Paper.
Several hours.
Characters and art (c)
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FREQUENTLY ASKED QUESTIONS
I really like your comic but I wanna give some small critique here. Three thing.
First the heroes are supposed to be here for revenge but none of them seem to be willing to kill their opponents which in the long run will cost them this war. I understand they're the good guys and have some sort of don't kill oath but then maybe the word "revenge" was wrong and "avenge" would better suit this. It also makes me wonder the stakes in a fight. Are they both trying to kill each other? No then one is at a disadvantage.
Second Ketek has said a lot that he and Kobura were like brothers but that's just all. Unless I've forgotten something we've never seen this bond in action. "Show don't tell." At least a few examples would've been fine. Otherwise it just comes off as talk.
Third and most important to me is Cheetah just trusting Ketek here. Why? He's a demon that was just trying to kill him and HAS killed one of his friends. It's not just him but we see Orca trusting him as well. Why are they both so readily willing to trust an enemy they've all sworn revenge on? It would be one thing if we saw Cheetah having a misguided trusting nature but I don't remember that. Maybe there should be more buildup or maybe established shared background for the characters to explain this instant trust.
Not trying to tell you how to tell your story but wanted to point out things that I think needed some tweaking.