Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
ONWARD_Page-56_Ch-3 by Sally-Ce

YAY, critique finally! :la:

I'm sorry it took so long :P As usual, I'm really impressed by the layout and overall flow of the page, it's very well done and it flows really nicely! I can spot little to no mistakes at all! Really well done!

Panel 1: I love Snatch's pose turning towards Tacoro :) It moves all the focus on him, and his pose and paler colour give him all the attention, really good!

Panel 2: Also very well done! :la: The picture is clear and we can see the size difference between Snatch and Tacoro! :D Hoho, Snatch is huge! XD

Panels 3-4-5: TA-CO-ROOOOOO! XDD Definitely my favourite moment in the entire comic! :rofl: Tacoro is absolutely cute! XD I love how you made the sequence, you even made his lips move according to what he said! Great! The only little issue is in the third panel of the sequence, panel 5. While in panels 3 and 4 Tacoro is seen friom a side and with a frontal perspective, in panel 5, the perspective suddenly moves up and we see him from above. Despit the effect it gives is really nice, i think the movement is a little too fast, and it would have worked even better if panel 5 was in frontal perspective and side view like the other two :) But that doesn't make it less awesome and cute! Tacoro is adorable ^_^

Panels 6-7: Once again, very well done! I don't spot any mistakes in composition here, the flow of speech bubbles is also really good :) Oh Tacoro! XDDDD

Panels 7-8: Fantastic job here too! Wow, I'm finding it really hard to spot mistakes, this page is nearly perfect! :la: The only minor thing here is Meya's front left foot, I think it's a little too far from the other foot, it gives me a slight impression that Meya is struggling to find her balance. But that's a really minor thing :)

Panel 9: It's pure epic. Nuff said! Beautiful expression, beautiful colouring, and Meya's intense stare is awesome! Really well done!
The Artist thought this was FAIR
38 out of 41 deviants thought this was fair.


Sally-Ce Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh gosh, it's okay. :) I'm so happy that you did it. ^^ When you do it doesn't matter to me. :aww:

TA-CO-ROOOOOO! xD I'm really happy you like that part! ^^
Hmm, I see what you mean with the "camera-angle-thing", but I did the last one on purpose. I wanted him to bee seen from above. :) But, I maybe should have made some "action-lines". :D

Oh gosh, I'll be sure to think about all of this tips you gave now. ^^ And also, a million thanks to you for all your sweet compliments! :hug: I really don't know how to thank you enough. :thanks: *sends you a thousand-million hugs*

I really appreciate that you took your time and write this! :huggle:
ARVEN92 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww thanks a lot for understanding :D

And sure thing, I can totally see what you mean XDDD Oh no, I think it looks better without action lines :D After all, he is already in the center of the panel and has all the attention :D

Aww thank you a lot my dear! :D And absolutely no problems! ^^ You deserve all the compliments in the world, because you're doing a really great job ^^
Sally-Ce Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I've been in that situation far too many times to NOT understand. xD

Aww, thank you a ton for all sweet words! Seriously, I appreciate it with whole my heart! :heart: :hug:
ARVEN92 Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist

Not a problem my dear friend, not a problem! <3 :hug:
Sally-Ce Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ARVEN92 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Add a Comment: