Chakra -B.O.T. Page 4 REDONE

I definitely think the transition between the last two panels is better in this redone page. Here, you have Led facing to the right, pointed in the same direction as C.Y.'s movement. Then, he's facing forward, which I think is a smoother direction change for Led than the old page, where he's facing two completely opposite directions in the last two panels.

The perspective and sense of movement for C.Y. when she's running away from Led in the seventh panel looks better than in the old version. In the old version, she looked like she was hopping rather than running away. How you placed her leg out of the panel here also gives her a sense of trying to get away as quickly as she can. Also, the sand "spray" from her running looks more natural here.

C.Y.'s head turn looks better here. It conveys the sense of surprise better and doesn't look as confusing as the last page, where the turn consists of two solid-looking C.Y.s. Here, her final movement (looking at Len) is clearer and more-solid looking, while the other two parts of her movement are, for the first one, more transparent, and for the second one, is more blurred. That expresses that the previous parts of the turn were in the past, and it looks smoother.

I love how in these new pages it's clearer by the color of the sky and general lighting that it's morning. In the old pages, it didn't really have that - the sky looked more like it was noontime.

The font choice and speech bubble style seem to be more integrated into the art, even though you had to put them in digitally for both versions. Here, while it still looks digital, it doesn't look out of place. In a way, the font and bubble style kind of match your drawing style.

Overall, this is a great improvement! I can't wait to see the new page redos and the next chapter!